in the dark of night.

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Fruity Biscuit (fluffy things are grate come join me on my cloud. ) on Thursday, 02-Mar-2006 13:15:40

in the dark at dead of night, sounds are pounding,
are they real?
are they there, or in my head?am i hear? safe in bed,
or some where else far away.

darkness pushes in close, all around pushing, pushing,
stil the sounds, don't know where or what they are, if there near or if there far,

darkness sounds, is that my life?
pushing pounding on and on.
now it starts to fade away, but why? and how,
and for how long.

i don't know and nore do i care.
sleep now, is coming my way, hope to sleep not to dream,
in the dreams the sounds begin,
but the darkness never leaves.

though in bed sound asleep,
still the darkness around me creaps.
nore the sun, nore the moon,
can chace away this world of gloom.

it enters places, no one should ever go.
leaving me feeling, dirty and low.
pushing, touching, trying to rest,
deep with in my akeing brest.
there for now, we have to leave,
or my soul shall shorely bleed.

Post 2 by julians mom (Veteran Zoner) on Thursday, 02-Mar-2006 15:02:08

i like it

Post 3 by Fruity Biscuit (fluffy things are grate come join me on my cloud. ) on Thursday, 02-Mar-2006 16:34:11

thanks honey

Post 4 by PorkInCider (Wind assisted.) on Thursday, 02-Mar-2006 20:28:49

wow! That's deep.

Post 5 by Perestroika (Her Swissness) on Friday, 03-Mar-2006 16:12:46

wow, i like it,...it's wonderful.

Post 6 by shea (number one pulse checking chicky) on Friday, 03-Mar-2006 17:18:49

wow you go chicky. big hugs, shea

Post 7 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Saturday, 04-Mar-2006 12:24:11

when you red this out loud its almost like Gothic rap very very good!

Post 8 by Resonant (Find me alive.) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 2:43:34

Linds. Wow. That's awesome, in an ouchy, unsettling sort of way. Is there more where it came from?

Post 9 by Vulpine (Generic Zoner) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 9:21:21

wow! Very good! You should definitely write more!

Post 10 by Fruity Biscuit (fluffy things are grate come join me on my cloud. ) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 9:37:06

thanks all for your comments, i will try and do more, but we will have to see. huggels. to you all.

Post 11 by JH_Radio (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 14:34:19

Hmm wow, not used to reading such deep works, I find yours an and Ky's writing a bit difacult to graps, ut it is good never the less. Smiley

Post 12 by poet (The premium poet) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 15:08:37

good job

Post 13 by chocolab (move over school!) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 15:46:42

I'm not really a big fan of poetry, but yours was beautiful smiles. huggles,
I'll vt when you're around next.

Post 14 by Pure love (I'm going for the prolific poster awards!) on Tuesday, 07-Mar-2006 10:18:03

Wow sis, you are a great writer!!! Go on this way!!! *smiles*